Daarmee bedoel ik te zeggen, dat he

Daarmee bedoel ik te zeggen, dat het verhaaltje veel in het ongewisse laat. Waarom bijvoorbeeld rijd de jongen over de plank als het zo gevaarlijk is? Is er geen andere weg? Wat zat er in de emmer die hij bij zich droeg? Waarom pikt Becky Jo de camera van haar broer? Verwacht ze dat er iets fout gaat of wil ze de jongen laten schrikken? Nogal gemeen eigenlijk. Dat ze wegslipt als er stof in haar gezicht waait is vervelend, maar daarom zou ze nog niet hoeven vallen. Hoe hoog zijn de rotsen ten opzichte van de creek? Zijn de twee meiden verliefd op Jamie James?

Natuurlijk is het moeilijk om in klein bestek iets aangrijpends te vertellen, maar naar mijn smaak zou er iets moeten gebeuren, waardoor het drama van het vallen en de redding een reden krijgen. Op het eind krijgt Jamie een nieuwe fiets van Becky Jo's vader. Dat is aardig.

Resultaten (Engels) 1:

By that I mean to say, that the story much in limbo late. Why, for example, drive the boy over the shelf if it so dangerous? Is there no other way? What was in the bucket to? Why Becky Jo picks up the camera of her brother? They expect that something goes wrong or they want to scare the boy? Quite common actually. That they wegslipt if dust blowing in her face is annoying, but she would not come. How high are the rocks compared to the creek? Are the two girls in love with Jamie James? Of course it is hard to tell, but in small cutlery aangrijpends something to my taste would something have to be done, making the drama of the fall and the rescue get a reason. In the end, Jamie gets a new bike by Becky Jo's father. That's nice.

Resultaten (Engels) 2:

By this I mean to say that the story much in the dark late. Why, for example driving the boy on the shelf if it's so dangerous? Is there no other way? What was in the bucket he was carrying? Why Becky Jo stole the camera from her brother? She expects that there will or will they scare the boy something wrong? Quite common actually. They slipping away like dust blowing in her face is annoying, but that she would not yet covered. What are the rocks relative to the creek? The two girls in love with Jamie James?

Of course it is difficult to tell something aangrijpends in small compass, but to my taste something should happen, making the drama of the fall and the salvation given a reason. In the end, Jamie gets a new bike Becky Jo's father. That is nice.

Resultaten (Engels) 3:

i mean to say that the story much in the dark. why, for example, the boy riding on the shelf, if it's so dangerous? is there any other way? what was in the bucket he was wearing? why pick becky jo the camera of her brother? they expect that something goes wrong or they want to scare the boy? quite mean. she wegslipt dust blowing in her face, if there is pain, but she would not have to fall. how high are the rocks towards the creek. the two girls in love with jamie james?of course, it is difficult for small space to tell something light, but to my mind, something should happen, and the drama of the attack and rescue a reason. in the end, jamie gets a new bike for becky jo's father. that's nice.